Short Story~The Storm
Here is a story that I wrote recently on a topic of a past O level paper. Please keep in mind while reading it that this is the third draft of the story. Feedback would be taken seriously and appreciated. An instantaneous splash of water landing on the deck woke up the sailor. He leapt out of bed and hurried up to the deck, hoping that all was well. The situation was worse than he had anticipated. It was raining cats and dogs, accompanied by a very strong gale. The roar of thunder indicated the beginning of a storm. The bottom of the ship was already flooded about six inches deep with water and its level was increasing with the rain. The sailor quickly rang the siren for help and grabbed some buckets. Sleepy-eyed men came out of their cabins to help and he directed them towards the flooded area, where he handed out buckets and yelled out instructions. His voice was barely audible over the heavy rain and thunder, but they seemed to understand. They went to work at once, ...
I absolutely love this story! It's really interesting and it grips you from the beginning (I mentioned before on Scratch). Talking of stories, you've reached the top of the waiting list in Scratch Story Circle 2 - I just wanted to let you know. :)
ReplyDeleteOkay, I'll try to write on as soon as possible. Thanks for letting me know, I haven't been on Scratch for a while.
DeleteOkay. :) I've only been going on Scratch more or less once/twice a week lately.
DeleteOh! It's an old comment I haven't seen before. Sorry! Of course, I remember you added onto 1/2 recently.
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